Hi,
I want to add an interior scene to my portfolio. With the help on Jonathan Williamson’s tutorial I created what I think an artists loft would look like. Untidy, things placed everywhere. Any critiques well accepted.
Thanks
Great work! I would say I think the red wall is a little to vibrant for this scene… If you made it a little darker, maybe a little more pastel that would work better. This is just my personal opinion. 
Also I had a question. How did you add the background image outside the window?
Those are a LOT of paintbrushes
Like biomech said, the red wall seems a bit too saturated. And personally I find those wooden log things coming out of the wall pretty weird and off putting with the rest of the scene.
As I mentioned in you WIP thread, the floor still seems a bit too bumpy, you could still lower that bump map a bit more.
it looks good but i think it could be far more untidy. my studio looks more like a tornado hit it.
@biomech
I agree the red does draw your eye. The background image is from cgtextures.com. It is just a plane with the image texture on it. I used the addon ‘import images as planes’ then it creates the plane in proportion to the image. It’s a shade less material, add the image texture into an emission node and add a light path then connect the ‘is camera ray’ to the strength of the emission node. That is the shade less material.
I rendered the room and background scenes in seperate render layers. then combined them in the compositor. Make sure when you render the room scene under ‘film’ in the render tab you check transparent. That way it will render the world transparent and allow you to add background images like that.
@CGSiino
True it is alot of paintbrushes I feel they are to close together. I am going to scatter them more and hopefully not look so dense. The red yes it is heavy will fix that. The logs I quiet like that they are wierd but looking at it they are rather big and distracting aswel. Will make then into branches rather than logs and see how it does. I added them cause the wall felt empty without them. Will lower the bump as well.
@Modron I will do my best to make it as such
Throw some pencils and papers around - I see a big pencil/charcoal drawing, but no evidence it was done at that table and not just put there for the reason of the photo.
Should also be some other papers and things around - signs that someone has been busy!
@DorienVincent That is very true
Personally I think that the floor should be all one color, that abrupt change is quite distracting. Also, the curved drawing table could use a stool or a chair, and the stool in the middle could be moved to the front of the drafting table. If that were more an easle, I could see the artist standing at it, but where it’s more like a drafting table, you would want to sit to be comfortable.
I quite like the scene though. And even though those logs are weird and don’t really fit the scene, artists are weird and do things like that in the real world so it’s alright.
It is, however if it was changed to something akin to a throw rug it’d work better. The one color idea is too… “clean”. I’ve got a friend who is a professional artist in NYC and her place – you’ll be lucky to find the actual floor sometimes.
As for the scene.
I’d darken the wall, remove the logs on said red wall, enlarge the second small canvas by the window as maybe it’s my computer screen but the “painting” looks like a blotch. Throw some paper & brushes around as mentioned.
And I would think what would really add is if you could partially color the cobra - not completely - and have a sheet spread underneath splotched with paints. Oh and a set of canvases against the wall. Just a few different sizes to give the idea of a successful artist whose running out of space on his/her wall to show off the work.
Oh and one last thing, possibly select a better outside picture. Might be my computer - its an old cruddy thing - but the outside is too uniform in color. Even if there was more color to the sky it’d look more realistic.
I apologize for taking long been very busy.
Ok, so I added more carpets some trash made the logs into branches and made the red less saturated which I feel adds so much more space to the scene. Enlarged the pencil drawing of the fist. Added a few paint tins tipped over and pencils to my cobra drawing and overall made it messier. The background image I really like the way its set so I am not to keen on changing it I did however add some contrast etc to make the colors pop a bit more. I can’t add more canvases because I will only use my own works and I unfortunately don’t have any more to place. The chair I thought leaving it in the middle is something odd that an artists might do is leave it on a small rug and sit and observe from it be it his painting or surroundings. If it really does not look right I will move it.
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Much better particularly the outside - it was very whitewashed and uniform in the original.
Thank you:) Yes it was very whitewashed quiet noticeable after you mentioned it
That rug in the middle with the edge down on the stairs kind of bothers me. I don’t feel like an artist would do that, simply because it seems dangerous. Also, the dark/light abrupt floor change is still pretty jarring. But I like it, much improved.
I think you’re talking about the glass panel from the stairs. If you look closer it also has a handrail.
I think you have made teh image way to busy. There is just too much stuff going on and I cant tell what teh focus of the image is
I purposely made it busy there is no organisation. It is a messy artists loft. But the focus of the image is the paintings by the brushes. I should do more to highlight that then.
I appreciate that, but its not good for the image.
I would lose the colored wall and most of the art on it. The eye is immediately drawn to that wall because thats the only color in teh room.
Then, I would move the easel with teh cobra art on it towards that wall, and closer to the stairs just a tad. Then I would find some way of putting some color there, maybe even swapping out that art for something more colorfull. Then I would put some painting supplies right there and maybe even some half eaten food on a stand next to it to make it seem as he was just there working and maybe even stopped to snap a quick picture.