An image from a scene in my film

This is an image from a scene in my film, curious what you think?

The animation for this set of images is here:

(fast forward about thirty seconds to get past intro)
the last three minutes are a summary of other scenes (which are also on Youtube, scenes C-2 through C-8, you can watch seperately if you like - but they were some of my first and the quality is in a constant state of flux)