Both of these versions are reasonable expressions of more-or-less the same thing … and, as such, they have the same photographic flaws. (What you did between the two of them is just a change in “color grading.”)
The first issue that I would raise with this one is that you have a lot of areas in which there is no detail in the shadows. For instance, the area at “three o’clock.” You’ve got a very large area of opaque black shadow there, which is never good.
The second issue, a little more subtle, is that you have a particularly interesting object there … the model ship … which does not now have any of the very subtle, almost unnoticeable accenting that I think it should have.
You see, when the human eye regards a “photograph,” we naturally look for (first…) the brightest and the most contrasty part of the scene. (Unfortunately for you, that’s not the light in the window of the doll-house: it’s the big round window in the back, lighted or not.) But, from that point, we look for a path. From one slightly accented scene-element to the next, leading in a circular path back to the starting point.
Now, at this point you could actually do this in two-D, by means of “burning in” and “dodging” the “print” that you now have. Experiment with this. (Note that you will have to shoot a brighter version so that you get some detail in those shadows that you can work with, because right now you have none.)