Autumn Lighthouse (Update #4)

Artwork Focused Critiques
#1

I revived one of my older projects – re-textured, sculpted, added SSS;)
I’m open to anything you have to say, so critique away.

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By the way, I’m already working on changing the sky (the one I have is too low-res).
EDIT: And also, those are supposed to be leaves blowing off the trees, but they don’t look like it. Any suggestions there?

#2

the island part looks realy good
may be for the leaves you could make them smaller and put more in
but the transition from water to land doesnt look right

#3

Nice, so far. invokes a peaceful setting quite well.
I’d suggest birds instead of leaves - the shape is recognizable in sillhouette.
The land-form is a bit too regular (did you use terragen for this or blender only?), I think adding some relief and vegitation to break it up would help. The water is good.
The buildings themselves look a tad flat - again, some relief in the form of fascias/trims, weathered shingles would be good. A bit of spec in the windows, too?

#4

Lovely scene! Very serene. The island looks good to me (wave beaten)…

#5

Wow i love the scene i dont know if you put "fog " around it or something but it looks really great.

#6

I like this image. I really only have 2 suggestions. First I would add a soft, yellow/orage light on the backside of the lighthouse which would give it a bit of a rim light effect… I think this would help give your buildings some shape because right now, they seem a little flat. My other suggestion would be to add a displacement map to break up the line between the island and the ocean… I’ve only seen lakes that calm. If its a lake, it doesnt need a lighthouse =P

#7

looks great its a lot better than mine. just one small crit. there is a gap between the tower and the building they are usually connected but i am not sure if you wanted them to be separate or not.

#8

mack: I think I’ll keep the leaves, but it’s true that I need to change that transition.

Eku: Great suggestions, thanks. And only blender, by the way.

ristesekuloski: Thanks :slight_smile:

darksidownz: I used blender’s mist.

SpindleRift: More good suggestions, I’ll work on those.

ledluver23: Riiiight… I forgot about that, thanks:yes:

Here’s and update. I rendered it a while ago so you won’t see most of your suggestions YET;). I’ll be sure to get them into the next update though.

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I accidentally disabled the mist here, but I’ll put it back.

#9

sea is not real, make some various sea waves
maybe it can help you
http://www.blender3d.cz/?q=more

lighting is flat=> make more small lights with falloff for the more dynamic lighting
as here http://www.g-taurus.ic.cz/wipnew/svetla3.jpg

light must correspond with sky, direction, color, energy
as here http://www.3dgrafika.cz/img/_gallery/21/21104.jpg

tune contrasts of everyone objects in renders without saturation(tune lighting in renders without saturation)
as here before http://www.g-taurus.ic.cz/example/nesladeno.jpg
after http://www.g-taurus.ic.cz/example/sladeno.jpg

stronger bumpmap for bricks of building, maybe only on bumpmap use Yafray

various island (small sharp stones around island(more different shapes))

more life(birds on sky)

point up on atmosphere(play with colors of atmosphere), colors of object can correspond with color of atmosphere
as here http://www.3dgrafika.cz/img/_gallery/24/24923.jpg
or here http://www.3dgrafika.cz/img/_gallery/24/24874.jpg

bigger depth(at the back some islands)

sorry for my poor english :-/

G_T

#10

Hey, its looking better ;), the trees look good, and so does the modeling, but the textures could be improved. Also the top red part of the lighthouse looks a little odd, i’m not sure what it is though, oh well :D, and the clothing looks lit up too much when compared to the background sunset.
Good job :yes:

#11

It looks great!

#12

Is there anyway to turn the first website into english?

#13

Love the changes. Only things left to do as near as I can tell would be to add some displacement to the water, and lower the saturation (ref setting) on the top red part of the light house. well done.

#14

It looks amazing! BUT there are 2 things.

  1. you might want to add waves to the edges of the island. the water doesnt look exactly right touching the island.
  2. make the leaves smaller. i thought they were birds at first lol.

but besides that its AMAZING!
happy blending

#15

The top of the lighthouse looks like a pacifier. It looks a bit too bright.

#16

Woops, a bit too much mist in this one:o

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…But an update none the less!

Things To Do* (Man, I can’t keep up with you people :stuck_out_tongue: )

  1. Make the displacement modifier on the water a little stronger and smaller texture. (So you can see it… :rolleyes:)
  2. Fix up that mist, obviously. DONE
  3. Give the lighthouse a shadow.DONE
    4.Light the buildings like the lighthouse.DONE
  4. Highlights on the edge of the island.DONE
  5. Change the sky so the sun is behind the clouds on the lower right.DONE
  6. small sharp stones around island
  7. Possible birds in the sky
  8. A bit of a stronger brick bumpmap.
#17

Update (many things still not done, but the renders take a long time)

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#18

I would model a few large rocks to break smooth outline of the land. The land looks unnatural.

And in case you’ve forgotten the sea/land intersection still looks odd :slight_smile:

#19

Its looking much improved, you’ve got a beautiful image going here. I agree with the others that the transition from land to sea needs some attention. Since you’ve got leaves and clothes blowing, there must be some wind, so the water ought to look at least a little choppy.

I love the rest of it, especially your trees and building, which look great.

#20

Wow, impressive updates. Coming along very nicely. Its a bit dark, but then, I think my monitor is set darker than most.
I think you really, really need to give that water some life. I’m sure you’ve seen cog’s website, which, though it focuses on animation, is chock full of good tips for water creation.
And to the poster who said lakes don’t need lighthouses, ya gotta get “up nort” to Michigan! They’re surrounded by some pretty big lakes :yes: with something like 100 historic lighthouses. Sadly, the photos I’ve been able to find weren’t great, but here’s a start.
EDIT: heh, I see you’re from Canada…so, unless you’re in Windsor, exchange “up nort” with “down south!”