Really good thread underway here: http://www.cgtalk.com/showthread.php?t=144111&page=1&pp=15
He has his wires posted as well.
I think you’re off to a good start. If you changed nothing you still have a good model. But with a few changes I think if could be even better.
What I see:
A) The collarbone is a nice detail, but if you’re going to have it, it needs to arch correctly up to the shoulder. Otherwise it looks like a funny line on the breast.
B) The line on the top of the breast makes it look like a breast implant. If you space out the two lines I highlighted, you can make that line go away. I have more thoughts on the breast that I outline below.
C ) Your current topography from the leg to the waist created some lines that go counter to the flow of the thigh muscles to pelvis. I suggest a modified flow of lines (D) would help you keep that bikini line you have, and even further define the mons venus.
An alternative design to the topography of the breast:
Think of a guy benchpressing weights it’s easy to visuallize the muscles of the chest connecting to the shoulder. But we forget this the moment we put mammary glands on top of those muscles.
Here I’ve sketched how the lines of the breast could flow to blend the breast shape to the shoulder. The bottom two lines should flow to the deltoids. The upper arching line suggest how the breast should flow and fade across the upper chest towards the arm.
Hope some of this is useful. Later.