Looking for critique about storytelling for "When the light starts to fade"

Hi there. :slight_smile:

Recently I found some time to create some fan-art for a music band, which unfortunately stoped to exist.
So in memoriam of them, I imagined what their last, final album cover art might have looked like.

The following shows the up-to-now final:

The story I want to tell is that even though the band stops to exist (the fading light of their light-bulb-logo) the memory of them continues to exit (visualized by showing the logo as a constellation in the night sky). Now I am wondering if this story can be read by just looking at the picture or if there are better visual suggestions about how to archive this.

While writing these lines, the idea arises that it might be even more atmospheric to consider putting the scene to a workspace within a factory workside. The constellation then shall be visible through a window and the light bulb could then be implemented to a desk lamp … let’s see. What do you think?

– – – A bit of a deeper insight to the development of the scene – – –
How did I actually ended up on this scene?
First of all, a great thanks to “Fun With Open Source” and its time lapse sealed light. Using the slow-motion option of youtube is perfect to follow those time lapses.


Then I played around with the scene and added some sparks (thanks to Creative Shrimps and its Realistic LIghting in Blender to show that it is easier to use emission planes than actual sparks)…

… and started to think about a scene with even more light bulbs involved.

One of the later idea was to place the scene in the wastelands but then it got finally replaced by the wooded environment (as shown in the first picture above)

Cheers
DoubleTheP

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Hello,

nice work,
i did not undestand the idea :sunglasses:

going to the happy hunting ground

Does this means a transition from sky to earth in some way ?
If so may be putting the bulb far away from the foreground, with a long cable (sad for your great setup inside the bulb).


(sorry for the outrageous gimposhopization)

Your second options with the factory sounds more explicit imho.
If i don’t misunderstand the idea you search to convey.

Very nice pics btw.

Hi Voppag,

rephrased the post and replaced the “happy hunting ground” by a less metaphoric explanation:

The story I want to tell is that even though the band stops to exist (the fading light of their light-bulb-logo) the memory of them continues to exit (visualized by showing the logo as a constellation in the night sky).

I like the visual idea with the long electrical cord in combination with the transition from earth to the sky. Unfortunately, the core (the afterglowing inside of the bulb) shall be essential as it should symbolize the end of life of the band. (Might become clearer in combination with the actual logo - not created by me)

Cheers
DoubleTheP

I like all the things you did with this. The only suggestion I’d make is that, if this is/was the band’s logo, the lettering in the filament should be very bright, definitely in front of the crossbar and not blocked by it, and maybe a little bit of “glow” should be added around it. The moonlight in the first shot is very good and the constellation is inspired. But, I’d really want to have the lighted text have “punch” and really stand out even with the moon behind it.

Hi,
I really love the work you made.

By looking the picture for the first time, the message I got was that even though something is ending (the light buld stopped fading) it doesn’t mean it is forgotten (the constelation is shining in the sky reminding us of the bulb). So for me the picture worked perfectly, since I understand that this was the meaning/story you were trying to communicate.

Compositionally the picture I think also works this way, since the light bulb being the biggest thing in the picture was the thing that first caught my attention, immediately being followed by the constellation in the background which is the bright element of the picture. So you first notice the bulb which is the “subject” of the scene (representing the band that ended) and then the stars which is the “object” of the scene (representing the message of the picture, the memorial of the band).

Some changes I would make:

  1. I would make the star constellation a bit brighter and the moonlight a bit darker, drawing more attention to the stars.
  2. I would add some cracks in the light buld, to highlight the fact that its dead not just off.

Also since the band its literally called “light factory” i think that the idea to put the scene in a factory is brilliant, you should definitelly try it.

I hoped that I was helpfull. All in all I love it, you trully nailed it!