Montblanc Fountain Pen


(Han Yang) #1


This is my first render after doughnut tutorial.
Please give me some advice on my render.


(icyou520) #2

I think you did a fantastic job, I would throw it in the portfolio and move on to another piece.


#3

Looks amazing! I’d use a different base plane texture, it feels wierd for a fancy pen to be sitting on a wooden board. Very well done, tho


#4

You have got there some shading issues due to bad topology - ngon or triangle fan near the steel part and some bad placed edge loops probably (can’t say precisely without wireframe shots).


(Han Yang) #5

Thank for all suggestions!
I added loop cuts and cleaned the topology. The shading looks better now.


(C_Campbell) #6

looks good. wonder how it would look with a piece of parchment under it and a few words written on it like . “Dear John” or like the end of a letter ." With All My Love, John." or maybe “Good bye cruel world.” with the last one you could throw a splatter of blood across the whole thing. … Just a thought.


(MadeWithFeet) #7

It’s pretty good.

The transition from body to the nib is pretty rough? it looks like the nib is made of the same material instead of being inserted in the body.