Having been inspired by my last project (a rendering of the digital world), I decided to try making a laptop, simply sitting on a desk, giving an alert that a file was saved. I intend to try putting this into an animation if I have the time…
Does anyone have any critique or suggestions about it?
Any help would be appreciated. I always aim to get better.
And here it is:
Cons
Needs higher res textures and normal, spec maps. More realistic lighting. It could also use some letters on the keys.
Pros
Modeling it good.
I agree textures need a lot of work
lighting needs work too
the laptop screen looks pretty bright so it should brighten up the keyboard area and some the table
It needs a little more depth, it seems a little flat, (not just the screen) but the keys and the back of the laptop. It is good modeling though, keep up the good work!
try turning on the shadow option in the lamp settings and also enabling ambient occlusion in the environment settings and turning it down to .1 or so.
That should give you the depth that your image is lacking.
Zoom in some more for a more interesting composition. The laptop is your subject and should take up more of the picture. Plus the room is fairly empty. Good start though.
OK, so taking most of your critique into account, I have now made the following render:
Note that I added a couple of documents on the table and drastically changed the lighting. I also moved the pencils, and edited the notebook texture.
More critique would be appreciated!
That’s a dramatic improvement! I love the texture on the desk.
Well, I think you’ve done a great job! I know there is alway room for improvement, but then, if you look close enough, you can find flaws in Vincent Van Gogh’s paintings as well.