The SunFlower Attempt

Artwork Focused Critiques
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Hi guys! This is Joshua Sander calling from earth…

My very latest work and my first one in cycles it’s the one that you can see below, this one take me a while to finish since i never used Photoshop (or Gimp) before so i have to learn how to make the textures (as you can see, the textures are not really good).

I also read a lot about composition but still there it’s something that it’s annoying me, but cant put my finger on it, so please, if you know what i got wrong or what can i improve i will be really happy to hear you :smiley: (or read you :P).

Really guys, i will love your critic, and the hard the better :slight_smile:

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If you would like a bigger resolution you can find it here (couldnt upload the image in the original resolution here in the forum, sorry): http://joshuasander.deviantart.com/art/The-SunFlower-Attempt-335479667

And the the file in BlendSwap: http://www.blendswap.com/blends/scenes/sunflower-in-a-workshop/

By the way, sorry for my really bad english

Regards,

-Joshua Sander

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i’ll disappoint you, but to be honest i can’t see anything that could be fixed* :wink:

whole image is mainained in the same style, composition is perfect, lightening is warm and gives that warm and calmness to the picture.

(*) you really need to study image to see 2 things, so for me image is still perfect .

  • hammer stick dont lie on table, so little rotation would be needed :stuck_out_tongue:
  • window doesnt “stuck” to right windowframe
3

Wow, man, thanks, it really means much to me and about the hammer and the window you are completely right, i will fix it hopefully this same night, again thank you for your critic :slight_smile:

4

Yes. Very solid work. At this point any suggestions are probably about personal preference. That said, some things to try:

  • If the sun outside is hot and yellow, maybe try a slightly cooler (more blue) light for inside. Perhaps slightly dimmer to create more contrast overall
  • Perhaps try a composition with the camera straight. At the moment the angle kind of balances the space below the toolboard, but with the camera straight, might feel a bit unbalanced, need to move things round.
5

The wall near the window looks a bit too bright.

6

It is very nice. I can’t see anything wrong with either other than the fact it’s a bit too bright.
But it is really good!

7

Thank you all guys for your comments and recomendations, im trying to redo the image with some corrections that all of you suggest, however it’s taking me a little more time that i expected, im having a little problem with the image that control the dirt in the windows (i swear, dont know what it’s going on) and reading a little more about compositing.

If you excuse me one question, i read this document (http://fox-orian.deviantart.com/art/Perspective-Composition-Pt-2-125042592), almost in the end of it recommend tilt a little the image to capture the viewer atention a little more, in wich cases this is good ? and in wich ones you dont have to do it ?? I have seen a lot of works fron different artist using this technique but still cant see a pettern.

Again thank you very much for your comments and recommendations, all of you are really helping me :slight_smile:

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That Perspective and Composition article is cool. As it says, the ‘Dutch Tilt’ is often associated with uneaseness, something being wrong:

“widely used to depict madness, unrest, exoticness, and disorientation” … " to “represent madness, disorientation, and/or drug psychosis.” (From http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dutch_angle)

To me, your scene actually looks peaceful and calm, and so the angle introduces a sense of unease… Perhaps try with just a very subtle angle, see how it feels. Or could go the other way and add something to confirm the unease; maybe some blood on one of the tools.