The plan is to have some gold text in the upper left corner. I know I have a lot to do, so this will be a one week sprint to see if I can make this decent before the deadline.
To do list:
Finish face
Snow flurries in the air
Snow dusting on everything
make blanket more interesting (fuzz?)
better wrapping paper
fix shoulder area (looks like he doesn’t have one right now)
decorate tree and fix window
Feel free to critique even though it’s still early, and don’t be shy if you have an idea.
It looks interesting so far. Even when I’m not sure what I actually see. You mentioned a shoulder area. Where is that?
There is nothing to say about the quality, that is great!
Nice composition, though filling out the torso will help. Besides the items you mentioned, it looks like the bench doesn’t have a back. Will be watching to see how this develops.
Looking great!! Love the idea, but IMO if you move the camera same angle but a bit to the left to see more of the character would make it easier to understand what one is seeing…it took me a while to get it!! Still great entry
Thanks guys! I’ll definitely keep those things in mind.
Love the idea, but IMO if you move the camera same angle but a bit to the left to see more of the character would make it easier to understand what one is seeing…it took me a while to get it!!
Great idea, but the problem I have is that if I do that, it screws up the composition and it instantly loses a lot of visual interest. I’ll try to make it more obvious, but not quite sure how yet.
it looks like the bench doesn’t have a back.
Thanks, I didn’t even notice that it was too low and hidden.
Here’s today’s progress (sorry if it’s a bit too bright, I’ll fix that for the next one):
Not if you keep the focal point of interest in one of the joining point of the rule of thirds, which in this case I reckon it’s the character’s head and the presents is balancing out the composition’s other third…I’ll see if I can post a sketch of what I mean (I’m better explaining it via drawing :rolleyes:) probably I didn’t expressed myself correctly because I didn’t want to use photographic jargons…Great work anyway, I love it.
Thanks for the details tommy, they got me thinking some more. I couldn’t move it too far to the left, but I did move it a bit and I think it helped. The result is a little less striking and a bit more gentle. Do you think it’s any more clear?
let’s ad some shiny snow on atop of the bench, and if the presents have been there for a long time(don’t know for how many hours he’s asleep) then some snow those too!
also there can be many toys kept on that window ledge.
awesome work!
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Yes definitively it soften the result and I think it plays more into the Xmas feeling of the scene…if it was for another kind of scene the original composition was great for it, as you say it’s more striking.
Amazing work!! Hope you win the BG Competition [thumbs up]
Those colors look beautiful, I just can’t quite figure out what it’s about. Santa or someone fell asleep while delivering presents?
Thanks! The story I set out to depict doesn’t really come through the image unfortunately. The idea I started with was an unknown person providing for a poor man on Christmas. A gift that isn’t deserved, like the original “Christmas present”. The Santa hat was just to make it more festive. Not sure what else I can do to convey the situation without adding anything distracting.
let’s ad some shiny snow on atop of the bench, and if the presents have been there for a long time(don’t know for how many hours he’s asleep) then some snow those too!
Consider it done
Amazing work!! Hope you win the BG Competition [thumbs up]
Yes you are right, it would detract from the image.
Only change I would make is bring down a notch the glow, maybe 2-5% to bring in a bit of detail 'cause the ribbon on the blue present is overexposed. Other than that I would leave it as it is, because now you reached a stage that anything you add would “dirty” the composition.
Try reducing the amount of falling snow to clean up the image, 'cause you lost something very nice which was the icecles on the bench’s arm rest.
Ok, thanks, that makes a lot more sense now. (about the story)
With the last update I’m really liking that top present, but the hat looks off. imo it was better before. keep it up!
Ok, almost done here. I want to make the face more realistic, so I might replace that if I have time. Other than that and some minor color correction, here is the final image. Not perfect, but not bad for such a short time. Thanks for all the critiques, they definitely helped!
