I softened the face a bit, shrunk the shoulders a bit and made them less broad, and tweaked a few things here and there. Oh, and of course put her in minimal clothing to show the model and topology better.
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Well here you go. First off your model looks nice, the proportions are fairly close to realistic, and the topology looks decent. Everything fits.
But she is not attractive, or appealing. And she is very boring, both her clothes and her body. The problem I see is that she is way too normal. She needs a style all her own, something memorable that sets her apart. Or she needs to be really cute. This is just my opinion, from what I have observed over the years
Here are some inspirations for you, in the super-cute style: