Looking for critiques to improve this scene.
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Thats really cool. I really like it, a lot. I am in the NY tristate and this really hits. My only critique is your scene balance. The cframing feels very left heavy. If you brighten up the moon that will probably fix the problem because all the weight is on the left 2/3 line so if you brighten up the windows on that building in the back right or push the boon a bit you can probably straighten that out. Or, as long as you are not too OCD about it, and I can be, but it is a legitimate option that is done all the time, just use the shift-x function of the camera to push the scene more to the right so we see a little more of the left platform and that will help balance it out a bit. That one is a bit tricky but if you need just set the pass out to 100% black and sorta look at it from a distance and you can see which parts look lighter and heavier in the image a lot easier. Sometimes right is wrong and wrong is right and you can see it really well at thumbnail size.
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Thanks for your reply!
I’m actually glad you commented on the composition as that’s something I pretty much came up with while working on this render and I had no specific direction from the start. I was actually debating with myself if I should make that moon brighter, but I was afraid it might steal too much of the viewer’s attention.
Thanks for the tips! I would’ve brighten the windows too before doing this render, but I was just lazy as this process has me copying empty cubes with a point light inside to each window to make it look like there is an actual 3D interior in the building, so you can see why I chose to be lazy 
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I agree it might flatten out the image which is why I think subtly x-shifting the camera left and puting more attention on the platform will really fix it up nice, but like I said, make it thumbnail size when you are shfiting the crop. our eyes at 2ft can only see about 1 inch in focus and the rest is peripheral and looking at a screen makes it harder. making the image smaller helps you see all of it at once and make more fine tunes determinations of composition.
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I think this scene is looking really good, additionally to what @ThorntonStrolia said I would also change the lights of the train on the right, since it is taking to much attention in my opinion.
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I featured you on BlenderNation, have a great weekend!
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I’d probably pull the camera back to give the subway car more room to “breathe.” You’ve got a lot of interesting things going on in-frame besides the car, and to my eye, “that works.”
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Thanks, glad to be part of it!
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