Whale

Artwork Focused Critiques
1

Hello,

this is still very early stage of creating, but I would appreciate some suggestions about topology of this whale.

It doesn´t have to be low-poly and it is not aiming to fit particular species of whales, it is just supposed to be well looking whale :slight_smile:

Thanks in advance.

Update- material and texture tests :

preview version:
http://peregrius.cz/olaf/nomas01.jpg

http://peregrius.cz/olaf/nomas02.jpg

2

the pectoral fins (or what they would be if this was a fish) look too long to me.

other than that, the topology looks pretty good. It really just needs a good material to make it look real.

It is hard to critique the shape of something that I have never seen.

3

I have added new version on first post- still I am aiming more on well looking stylization (but not cartoon) then on photoreal, but believable appearance is my goal too.
And so C&C are welcome, thanx :slight_smile:

4

I think perhaps the texture should be sharper. The blurryness around the mouth area where the white turns into blue makes the texture look like low-resolution. I’m not sure if that’s how it would be in real life, but I think it might make it look better.

What you’ve done so far is quite nice! I’m eager to see how this turns out. :slight_smile:

5

I’m not sure what you changed since SamAdam’s post, but I think said fins look to be the right length compared to reference pictures I can find.

I second Clean3d’s call on the texture, it currently gives a ‘game art’ feel to the model because of the low resolution (Not neccessarily a bad thing, but if you are going for mid - high poly it would be a shame to sacrifice a nice model to a low res texture). The only other crit I have is that the dorsal fin (I think. The one on the back, in case I have it wrong) is not disticnt enough from the body, it should be more sharply defined where the fin meets the back of the whale.

Beyond that its looking good.

6

The texture looks a little odd below the mouth. Hey, would you want to add my home boy great white in the background? I have some remoras attached to him as well. https://blenderartists.org/forum/viewtopic.php?t=52977&postdays=0&postorder=asc&start=15

7

Thank you for tips so far:)

I have edited first post with new version with sharper texture, hopefuly it looks better now :slight_smile:

8

The diffuse texture is much, much improved. I’d like to see a more detailed bump map on the top and fins, though. The color is good in those areas, but the surface looks too smooth, IMHO.